Monday, May 3, 2010

55 Fiction #12

A cold shiver ran down his spine. He stared at the killer, fast asleep. The local government had announced a reward on the killer's head. His hands groped the darkness for his camping knife. A swift stab at the neck would do it. "But is it necessary? Afterall there are only 1141 of them left."

17 comments:

Nethra said...

It took me a while to realize what exactly 1141 had to do here.
Nice one! :)

Manjari Singh said...

kya kahoon,. u r just too good with ur 55 words!!!

Mahesh Kalaal said...

Impressive post....
did hit d bull's eye...
loved it....perfect 55ier...
it has got both environmental, and social domains ...
Great work buddy...kudos to you..
keep writing more...

Chanz said...

hahaha... good one...

Karan Shah said...

a straight and strong social msg in just 55 words...

Surbhi Jain said...

a very crisp message to show something as grave as this...
Really nice concept......!

Rajlakshmi said...

wow thats an interesting microfiction :)
well written

Roshmi Sinha said...

Too good!

The 1141 bit put a different spin to the story...

Urvashi said...

wow.....jus 55 words a gr8 message.. :) :)

Chatterbox said...

Excellent work Saurabh :)
You've hit the bulls-eye with that one :D :D

Keep 'em coming!!

Tavish Chadha(sensible-bakwas.com) said...

brilliant... thats all i can say to this... keep them coming!

Cheers!
Tavish

Megha said...

wow...whatta twist...nice :)

myself said...

Kya baat hai!! fatte yaar :)

simply superb saurabh! u r a 55-er master.

claps! claps! n more claps :D

kudos. keep 55-ing.

Shilpa Garg said...

Wow!! That's a good one!!
Liked the message and the twist!! :)

animax1610 said...

is it alwez dat d lang of fictn shd b ambiguous & HLL ?
i wonder , how easily d othr ppl got itz aftrmath.

Saurabh Panshikar said...

@net
Yay I made you think!

@Manjari
Thanks yaar...

@Mahesh
Thanks man... This was a "Mahesh" kinda 55-er. Twist + social msg!

@Chanz, Karan, Surbhi
Thanks guys

@Rajlakshmi, Roshmi, Urvashi
Thank you... Glad you liked it.

@CB
Thanks a lot... Hoping to dish out some more...

@Tavs
yup dude. Thanks for dropping by

@Megha
Dhanyavaad... Aaj kal english madhe comment?

@myself
whoa! thanks for all the appreciation! I likie!

@SG
Thanks a lot

@Aniket
Bloggersfolk are smart you see... Thanks for dropping in...

Pal said...

Excellent!!!

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